Hi Brianna,
Your first design has a nice color scheme and layout, but the circle above the project descriptions might work better if they were solid. The white space is really competing with the white space in the circles right now.
Your second design is better in my opinion. I like the combination of solid shapes with textured shapes. I think type could be pushed a bit more -- pick a more bold typeface. Also, you might consider changing the type in the two big shapes from black to white or a light blue.
Preliminary Critique
- erika.murray
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Fate, my friend, you say the strangest things
Erika Murray
Erika Murray
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breezy,
I really enjoy your first home page. It has nice colors and repeating elements, and I really like the layout. All I can say is to justify your text and improve the difference in terms of contrast with the headline and the bubbles behind it.
Jose Macias.
I really enjoy your first home page. It has nice colors and repeating elements, and I really like the layout. All I can say is to justify your text and improve the difference in terms of contrast with the headline and the bubbles behind it.
Jose Macias.
Jose Macias.
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Hi Brianna!
The one with the diamonds is more dynamic. It is visually interesting to look at, yet is easily navigable. I'm finding the body copy typeface to be a bit difficult to read although it does well to reflect the geometric shapes theme. Overall the colors you have are working well!
The one with the diamonds is more dynamic. It is visually interesting to look at, yet is easily navigable. I'm finding the body copy typeface to be a bit difficult to read although it does well to reflect the geometric shapes theme. Overall the colors you have are working well!
Melissa Peel
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Oooo these are lovely designs! I love the ideas you're executing and I think I like the first one more. However, I have problems with both. The second design has readability issues and feels messy. Text elements are just kinda squished really close to other things and I don't think that it helps, particularly with the paragraph of body copy. The first design has the same issue, where things are being forced to fit into spaces and they don't really feel like they belong there (particularly your name and the texts "Project 2" and "Project 3"). Try shrinking the size of the type or adding a margin of space all the way around, to give breathing room. Maybe try changing colors, too, as your name doesn't come across immediately in the first design.
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- Zera-Chann
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Re: Preliminary Critique
Hey Brianna!
I love you colors and the design layout on you second one!
My only critique is change to color on your font's on the diamonds it's a little difficult to read.
Can't wait to see your finished work!
I love you colors and the design layout on you second one!
My only critique is change to color on your font's on the diamonds it's a little difficult to read.
Can't wait to see your finished work!
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The bottom design has really nice color to it and I like the unique angles.
- JulianEmme
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I would go with the first one, the type on the second one against those bold dark shapes gets lost. The colors and shapes are a little too distracting. The first one works very well though.
Julian Emme