Project 1 Preliminary Critique

[z1claudia]

Hi, a little info about me is I like cartoons/illustrations as well as martial arts. So in my roughs I'm trying to combine them both in my design. That's why the main images are a boxing glove, laptop, and a muay thai female fighter. I hope that reads well without me having to explain it in my description. I plan to add more detail to the images I have in my roughs. These were just quick images to use on the roughs.

I didn't want to use much color in my designs. I wanted to stick to a more black and white design. Mainly because I feel the more freedom you have in a design the more overwhelming it can be or the more overboard you can get with it. So it's my way of limiting myself. I based it off a bit of this website I found /https://demainjarrete.stpo.fr/blog-94-d ... rrete.html. I like the style of it, it seems fun to me. I also thought the way the black and white was used was pretty dynamic. Plus i'm just a sucker for cartoons.

The other website that was a big inspiration to me was https://www.awwwards.com/. It gave me a lot of inspirations to my designs. Makes me see how else I could try to play around with my designs.

Let me know what you think. I hope they came off clear to understand but also interesting. I tried to add just enough stuff so it doesn't feel too boring but I am also trying to not crowd my design.

[erino]

Cool concept I really like on the top design the hierarchy of your image really stands out!
Great composition on both designs.
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[John1612]

With your color scheme you got going I think the design on the bottom works the best. It is simple and everything sticks out. You basically thought about everything clearly it really shows. If there was one thing I would consider changing it would be the black type its readable but it also looks a little muddy.

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[lewlewland]

I think that I like your first computer rough the most and then the last mobile rough. The other computer rough isn't as legible for me and I think that the design in the last mobile rough is very interesting while also easy to look at and understand. Only other thing I'd maybe suggest is to think about adding an accent color maybe.

[stars2night]

I really love the 1st computer rough at the top and the last mobile at the bottom. I love the balance of black and white and how you layered images. I really liked your second computer rough for you acting like you had like a preview window with a Coming Soon message. That's a really fun idea. I also like the first computer rough with the white outline around the black about me box. I also love all your fonts.

In the first mobile rough (at the top), I think it needs work on placing the about me text. It seems kind of out of place where it is at. You could moving it more into the white section and you could maybe try having the computer overlap it a little bit to add more depth (but not enough to really impair reading).

[itsdrrlcarden]

I really like the strong contrast between the white and black. Both work really well. I think you just need to work with position just to make everything flow and legible. Good work!

[Instructor]

Oh, this is some good stuff here! I like this idea you've had of telling your story through a collage of illustrations and photographs. It works well in both designs.

I think your first design is a little better, but only by a matter of degree. I think I like its visual texture and the visual proximity of your summary illustrations a little better. I like the use of the phot and the code as textures to enhance the boxing glove and computer illustrations. You're reinforcing your design narrative and it's really working. Fantastic contrast on these designs, as you would expect from a design that doesn't use color. Though I don't miss color one bit, surprisingly enough. I like your comic book typeface too. It goes well with your illustrational aesthetic. Your sans-serif bodycopy works well with it. Great use of "design language" between your two rough types. I can easily see your computer design and your mobile design are the same website.

Make your "Reference Links" button the same font as your "Project Two" and Project Three" buttons. Make sure your TMCC logo, your class summary information, and your email all have the same baseline at the bottom. On your computer design move your class summary information just a touch to the right. It's a little close to the left edge now.

Excellent work! Is that you in the photo ready to go kick some ass?

[Gr8K8]

Both of these designs have great composition and contrast!

I love your symmetry in the web version of your first design. I also really like that your font for your name and home section has a similar feel/style/roundness of the boxing glove! I would be interested to see what it would look like if you brought all the text on the left down to the vertical center of the page.

As much as I like your first design I think I prefer your second design. The way you layered the sharpie-like text onto the tape image is really awesome and makes it feel personal. In the web version of this design, your white text feels a little close to your name. It may feel less crowded if you brought it down a bit. On the mobile version I think the tape gets a little washed out in the white of the computer light. I think this could be solved by adding a small darker shadow like the tape that your name is on.

[Unicorn_Service]

I am also a great fan of cartoons. I am working on making video reviews for many of them.

This design is the most greatest I have even seen among all of these. I just can't pick favorites between them. The bold contrast is so much more dynamic than any other design has had to exhibit.

What I do think however is that the mobile screen ought to be symmetrical.

[JBobier]

I like the use of black and white to create balance in both designs. You have created symmetry well in all of them. I think I like the bottom two designs as my favorite. Overall I think you have done a good job!