Project 1 Preliminary Critique

[IvorHarvey]

I'm Ivor and these are my two roughs I've created for this project. While working on this I found these two websites helpful in my creative process!

Link 1: https://www.smashingmagazine.com/2009/0 ... o-website/ This website gave useful tips on what you should add to make a successful online portfolio, both looking at how to arrange content and how to design the page as a whole.

Link 2: http://www.howdesign.com/design-career/ ... portfolio/ With this website it has a number of resources you can turn to when looking for a way to create your design. It has links that show how to create your online portfolio, as well as examples of some online portfolios.

[erose]

Hi Ivor:

I do like your black & white page, but the other page is visual comfort food for me. The colors of the page (I do love blues) blend perfectly with the colors of your image. It's clean, clear & crisp. I feel like I'm at the beach!

The suggestion I have is for your black & white page. I feel like your image may be too light for the rest of your page. I don't know, it's a tough one on how to go about it. It feels like the image needs more POP to fit in with the bright white & bright black of the rest of your page.

Great pages!

[michelek]

Hey Ivor,

I like the black and white one the best. Maybe a pop of color. Think Ed is right about the image, maybe framed or maybe a different image. I think you have more to work with as time goes on with this design. I like the colors in the other layout but liked the other one.

[Stephski]

Hi Ivor,

Both designs look great! The first one makes me think of Art Deco, the lines around your boxes and your typeface are perfect. It's clean and straightforward. How do you intend to design the content that will go in your boxes? Will they follow the black and white theme or will they be colorful?
The second design is also clean and straightforward. Your name really stands out! I can't think of anything that needs to be changed...!

(Were you at Burning Man too last summer??)

[sarah.alvarado]

Hello Ivor,
I am really liking your first design. It looks very clean and yet unique! I would suggest that you should raise your name above the 'projects' and 'links' boxes so that they line up with the border and not bleed into the boxes. Great work!

[BreeAnn]

Hi Ivor,

I like the photo you went with and I agree with what people are saying about it in the black and white design, it kind of gets washed out against the stark black and white. It almost feels like your photo should be a stencil. I'd also like to see what it looks like with your name separated from the boxes below it, I had to look for it in this design, as opposed to how obvious it is in the blue one. While I like both designs, I'm curious to see the blue one in black and white and how they compare.

[Instructor]

I like the ideas that I see here. I'd have liked to see a little more on how your content was going to lay out, but I get the gist from your samples.

I'm immediately drawn to your second idea. The first one seems pretty plain and kind of disjointed. This second one though ...

It looks like a 1930s playbill. The high contrast immediately catches the eye The long, vertical layout serves well to drag the eye through the composition. Your type is very well chosen and helps to quickly establish the atmosphere. I like the way your name blends into the left and right columns. What I can see of your navigation is well placed and easy to follow. I also like the second stroke around each box. It reinforces the importance of each content area and succeeds in looking very, very deco.

I think it would look tighter if the columns all ended at the same bottom line to create a nice horizontal resonance. I'd also move down the top of your center column just a touch to add some margin between it and your picture.

Nice ideas! I really like the ethic of that second one.

BTW, I'd recommend using another format other than TIFFs. The forum has some trouble with them. Try JPEGs next time.

[elizabeth_mccurdy]

hello Ivor,

I like both designs. I like the second design better. I think it is stronger, I like the white and black contrast and the type. The picture and the position make it look nice. I know you can play more with the design and position. Also you are missing some information so it is hard too see it all together so I am really excited to see which one you chose and how it will look in the end.

[gracelark]

I'm really digging your black and white one. That blow horn pic is epic, and such a strong image deserves a ballsy setting, thus doesn't quite jive with the beachy scene. I see the three dots above 'About me' and I wonder if the open circle would signify which bar one is hovered over/clicked on, and if you would possibly be planning to have that featured text in a different color? The typography of your name on the beachy one is really special though.