Hey,
I like your second layout better, its easier to read and give a clean fresh feeling. Your first one has a lot going on and the colors are kinda hard to read on each other but I do like the layout. Good job all around!
Project 1, First Critique
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"A day without laughter is a day wasted." - Charlie Chaplin
Brianna Mick
Brianna Mick
Re: Project 1, First Critique
cheytothet,
The second home page is the way to go. The first one is too clunky and the font style doesn't fir the theme, but the second one is the opposite of that (less is more). It has a such simplistic but inviting approach to it that it feels like being welcomed to a home. The colors are great and so is the layout. The thing to improve on is the type style to fit the theme.
The second home page is the way to go. The first one is too clunky and the font style doesn't fir the theme, but the second one is the opposite of that (less is more). It has a such simplistic but inviting approach to it that it feels like being welcomed to a home. The colors are great and so is the layout. The thing to improve on is the type style to fit the theme.
Jose Macias.
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Ohh these are cute and wonderful! I love your color choices!
I feel like your first design is really, really busy to look at. There's so much going on and your eye is drawn everywhere so that there isn't really a focus. I might recommend tuning down the saturation of some of the decorative elements like the rows of dots, to see if that helps any.
As for the second design, my only issue is with some of the spacing. The word "Projects" is a bit farther to the left than it needs to be I think, and when compared to the other elements on the page, it feels weird that the word "Links" is so far away from that horizontal divider bar associated with its section. There's some lack in consistency across the elements in this regard.
I feel like your first design is really, really busy to look at. There's so much going on and your eye is drawn everywhere so that there isn't really a focus. I might recommend tuning down the saturation of some of the decorative elements like the rows of dots, to see if that helps any.
As for the second design, my only issue is with some of the spacing. The word "Projects" is a bit farther to the left than it needs to be I think, and when compared to the other elements on the page, it feels weird that the word "Links" is so far away from that horizontal divider bar associated with its section. There's some lack in consistency across the elements in this regard.
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Re: Project 1, First Critique
Hi Chalyn!
These two designs are beautiful! The first one is great how you put all of it together, but the second one is easier to navigate and read. If the navigation bar was more to the right (running off the page like the elements on the left), it would give the text more space and help with the asymmetrical flow of the page. I like the flowers and the spring color theme, sweet!
These two designs are beautiful! The first one is great how you put all of it together, but the second one is easier to navigate and read. If the navigation bar was more to the right (running off the page like the elements on the left), it would give the text more space and help with the asymmetrical flow of the page. I like the flowers and the spring color theme, sweet!
Melissa Peel
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Hi Chalyn,
I like your second design it is really clean and the type is really easy to read. Maybe make the navigation bar a little bigger so it is easier to find.
I like your second design it is really clean and the type is really easy to read. Maybe make the navigation bar a little bigger so it is easier to find.
Cassandra Bowers
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Hey Chalyn!
i love the colors of the first one, it really stands out and it's fun enough where it doens't hurt my eyes!
I would say change the font it self it's a little hard to read.
Can't wait to see the finished work!
i love the colors of the first one, it really stands out and it's fun enough where it doens't hurt my eyes!
I would say change the font it self it's a little hard to read.
Can't wait to see the finished work!
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Your second design is very good! The color is nice and overall the website is very readable. Looks very nice, good job!
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The color contrast on the first one is a little odd, but the second one works very well. The body copy font is a little hard to read though.
Julian Emme