project_one Final

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kamilyon
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project_one Final

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This is the final for my Project one. I wanted to create something that was Illustrative. Something that would tell a story. Well yesterday something brand new popped into my head for it but there was no turning back lol I will do the other concept later. For some reason my letters look weird and pixelated but I hope you like.
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I like it very cute! I think the purple is empty a little
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I love your idea and the refinement works very well, as far as I'm concerned. The only thing I was wondering about was the alphabetical blocks you had in your original roughs. I thought they would work well for your negative space. I would try playing with that, but other than that, I think its a great design :D
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kamilyon
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New proj one final.

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so i posted prematurely. I went back and did some more into it. it looked really blank. I have to do the blocks still but they are giving me a fit. oh and i wrote in my little about me thing because for some reason i couldn't get the type to not look like a 80's chat house reject.
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I want to see something on the bottom of her shoes, like she stepped in something.
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There's a typo in your first line of text: "an illustrator" rather than "a illustrator". Having it an angle like that does make it a little difficult to read.
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The cool fuzzy edge drop-shadows applied in the design are "ghosting" everything. Everything is so fuzzy my eye doesn't know where to start. Use harder edges and try giving the doll a more definite shadow and adding the fuzzies as the room goes back. The illustrations itself is wonderful, great job on pulling that off. Maybe also, try not rotating that block of text at such an intense angle it's going to be hard to read when you get that blurry text thing figured out.
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aznpandaaa
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I'm liking this a lot! Its a cute page that can grab attention to the viewers asking themselves "What is this? Lets find out". I love your doll concept and I'm liking your window buttons. Great job!
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still looks great =)
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Re: New proj one final.

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Nice illustration, can't wait to see how your buttons will look....great job!!

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