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Re: New proj one final.
Posted: Tue Mar 04, 2014 12:55 am
by wbenavente
Looking good! I'm liking the addition of other objects in the illustration. It helped fill up some of that negative space but I still see a big white space at the bottom of your page. Add more of the blocks that you had previously in your roughs or something just to fill in that last space at the bottom? Good work!
Re: New proj one final.
Posted: Tue Mar 04, 2014 8:56 pm
by grc_175_rpereyra
I really like your illustration, nice use of colors. looks great..
Re: New proj one final.
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 12:10 pm
by tehgrimza
The text is really hard to read from the size I see here, I recall you had some issues with it pixelating on you. Have you found a way around that besides just drawling the type in?
I also think how you have your info in a block text at the bottom left, you should use the entire bottom "line" in a sense of the webpage and just separate those out along the bottom, and maybe change up the color of the text for a better contrast?
Add a piece of gum to the bottom of the doll's shoe, would give it some character
Re: New proj one final.
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 3:11 pm
by Deitrik
I like this design, Its just really unique and playful. I like the tmcc logo that you guys are using for the commercial it really fits well here for a home page for you ties it all together good job. I would say play with the type and buttons a bit more though.
Re: project_one Final
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 5:32 pm
by kirin
I'm glad you went with this design. I really enjoyed it. Over all great job, the only thing thats a small issue is i cant see the text on the buttons that well.
Re: New proj one final.
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 6:29 pm
by kirin
Still a great design, but the text for the buttons still isn't dark enough in my opinion, so maybe my eyes are broken.
Re: project_one Final
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 9:17 pm
by elizabeth_mejia
This is such a cute and original design. I really like the detail you put into the doll especially the hair. I also like the colors you chose. My only suggestion would be for the type inside the buttons, the type is very light and a little difficult to read so I suggest darkening the words up a bit, but other than that great job!
Re: project_one Final
Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 9:41 pm
by Instructor
MOD POST: I merged the two Kami threads together so we could all see each other's comments on Kami's finals.
This one has perhaps the best sense of whimsy of any of the projects I've yet seen. TMCC Man is bringing a smile to my face as I'm typing this.
Such great use of imagery throughout this design. The nursery theme is fun and I like the coloring book and picture frame navigation (even if it could be a little clearer). The doll as focal point works well, as do the bright colors and crayon quality. Good work.
In fact, the only area where it falls down a little is the type. I have trouble reading your navigation buttons and your bodycopy. Also the descriptor font in the lower left corner (looks like the opening frame to a music video) seems a little jarring with the rest of the design.
Otherwise, a really nice design that's so heartwarming.
Re: project_one Final
Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 11:09 am
by MattShock23
Yay, you made the buttons look like pictures on the wall
Good job on the design Kami, it looks nice.
Re: project_one Final
Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 3:59 pm
by danistephens3
I love the detail in the baby doll. I think that that adds to the design. The information down on the bottom left corner seems kind of boring with the rest of the design. Maybe try adding a fun font? just a suggestion. I do really like this concept though!
Good job!