Re: Prj1 Prelim Shalie Chakarun
Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2014 10:41 am
Hey Shalie,
You've got some interesting ideas started here, and I'd be interested to see where you go with either one of them. The colors, while definitely more earthen, are strong in their execution and can definitely hold a person's interest. However, you've got major legibility issues going on with both of them, to the point that I had difficulty discerning your titles and bodycopy from the background images. There are a few ways you can fix this, and you don't even have to scale down your images to do it—simply providing a transparent backdrop to put the bodycopy on top of can help a lot. Of the two I'm leaning more toward to the second because that's a very unique image you have going on there. You just have to go around toning down the busy look all the elements have going on.
You've got some interesting ideas started here, and I'd be interested to see where you go with either one of them. The colors, while definitely more earthen, are strong in their execution and can definitely hold a person's interest. However, you've got major legibility issues going on with both of them, to the point that I had difficulty discerning your titles and bodycopy from the background images. There are a few ways you can fix this, and you don't even have to scale down your images to do it—simply providing a transparent backdrop to put the bodycopy on top of can help a lot. Of the two I'm leaning more toward to the second because that's a very unique image you have going on there. You just have to go around toning down the busy look all the elements have going on.