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Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Wed Oct 01, 2014 1:20 pm
by dboudinot
Hi Georgia,

The blue font and black background look great together. I do, however, agree that the top is too crowded; I would remove, scale or reorganize the top photos to create a little more balance. I also feel like the text at the top needs to be aligned differently; I feel like it's slightly out of place. Your photos are gorgeous though, so I can see why it's hard not to keep them all.

Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Wed Oct 01, 2014 6:10 pm
by Instructor
Hm. An interesting composition. Much improved from your preliminary work.

The imagery really tells a story here doesn't it? It adds a feeling of worldliness to the design. I like that most of the imagery is blue or has blue tones in it to harmonize with the blue type and buttons. I think black is a strong background color that allows the images to really pop and show off their colors against it. I also like the use of the image galleries as framing devices around the bodycopy. It really is a nice clean layout that presents the images and then stays out of the way. The handwriting font works well here. It gives the design a fun creativity that would otherwise not be there in such a clean layout.

My big issue here though is margin. Everything outside of the collages seems to crammed together. The whole composition needed to be opened up a bit more. More room between the top and bottom collages and the middle bodycopy. More room between the navigation and the top collage. More room between the top bar and the navigation. And so on. Also, the blue stroke color on your buttons should have been the same color as your type.

A very good effort. It really presents the imagery well.

Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2014 12:53 am
by gotsatisfaction247
Beautiful pictures!!!! Just as an idea, the picture on the left conor on the top ot the other picture of the sunset, I might make it bigger and just remove all of the picture on the top. Also the pictures on the bottom look very need, I like how you put them all in even size boxses against each other, maybe use them as your navigational buttons. Also I might change the blue text to white for more contranct and play a little bet more with the fond type for a cleaner look. Once again beutiful picture, great start!!!!

Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2014 12:13 pm
by old_man_pat
Georgia, I like the changes you've made from the roughs. Of course, the pictures are outstanding, and match your blue & black color selection well (my personal favorites are the bright red sunset and blue/red flowers). I also like the font selection for your body text, the personalized font for your name and subtitle, as well as the symmetrical pictures laid out at the bottom. I like what you're doing with the collage, but part of me feels like the collage is only partly complete with just a few photos overlapping the others. If you work with the collage effect at the top, perhaps 'completing' it, I think it would balance nicely with the symmetrical layout at the bottom. Also, I agree the GRC paragraph in the upper left corner should be moved either to the far right or the very bottom of the footer. Your name and subtitle should be the primary attractor at the top. Beautiful work!

Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2014 1:16 pm
by ryansegal
Hi Georgia,

I love the range of images that you have on your page, it really shows off a love of travel that's very cool. However, I think the density of the images is a little too high. You can definitely show off all of your images on your site, just maybe not quite this many at once. It makes it hard to appreciate one single image, and clutters up the rest of the page. Organizationally, I think your credits should have a little less dominance in the design; putting them on the same level as your name means they're just as important, which probably isn't the case. I also think the design seems to be leaning to the right a bit; it might look cleaner if you centered the elements more. This is a nice improvement over your roughs, so good job.

Re: Final Critique For Project One

Posted: Thu Oct 02, 2014 4:37 pm
by Miasera
Hi Georgia,

I like where you're going with this design, but it still feels like it has a ways to go. It might be because it seems too busy, with the number of photos going on that aren't following along a grid format. Still, it's colorful and organized and I like that about it.