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Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2015 2:28 pm
by Instructor
Hm, got some interesting ideas here. I prefer your first design over your second. Your second has a nouveau bluebook kind of look that fells pretty interesting, but I like the layout, color choices and execution of the first one a bit better.

The high contrast black on white background really pops the type at the top out. Congrats on finding a non-annoying use of script type as well. That contrast also helps offset and accentuate the colors of the navigation blocks. I like the use of proximity to gather everything up as well.

Right now the whole design is a bit bottom heavy though. I'd delete the gray bar and push everything up so it's vertically centered. Horizontally you're good. Also, move the words in the navigation blocks an arrow click or two.

Nice work! I'm looking forward to the finalized version.

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2015 3:00 pm
by punkassbookjockey
By gray bar, do you mean the text at the top of the page?

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2015 3:20 pm
by Instructor
punkassbookjockey wrote:By gray bar, do you mean the text at the top of the page?
Nah, I mean the bar above the text. Like so.
jena_gray_bar.jpg

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2015 4:41 pm
by punkassbookjockey
That isn't actually in my design, and doesn't show up on my screen. Don't know where it came from?!

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Tue Sep 15, 2015 6:28 pm
by Instructor
Ah.

Well, then your design is already vertically centered!

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2015 7:54 pm
by daveryjones
I definitely like the first rough. Your colors are contrasting just enough with your background that it's not too overwhelming. I do have a hard time with the script italics on the diamonds because I find it hard to read, especially "sketchbook." Where is your image? I would like to see how you plan to incorporate your body copy and imagery.

Great start

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2015 11:50 am
by anna_lyse
The first design has a better feel to me, I like the design choice with the diamonds and the idea to have them rollover into a teaser picture. I also really like the feather you drew in Illustrator to be the contact button. For the second design idea, I like the thought of the page being in an art deco style, but to me the buttons get a little lost being the same color as the background. Overall I really like your first design idea.

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Sun Sep 20, 2015 3:57 pm
by nicolemae09
I feel that your first one has more potential. I like the thought of previews popping up within the squares. I would like to see a little more eye candy. Some graphic, illustration, or maybe just some of your work in the background would be great to see. :)

-Ashley Anderson

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Mon Sep 21, 2015 5:53 am
by ravennvrmre
I like the top design it’s simile but I like the overlap and the colors it “makes”. It’s a really nice color wheel without actually being one (I think you could still have the color wheel be a part of it even if you go with the teaser pictures, that would be really cool). I also like that it seems pretty interactive. However, you don’t have a paragraph about yourself (I know you have an about button but I don’t know if that technically counts). Really like the idea of the feather but I don’t know how obvious it will be that it’s a contact button. Great ideas though, keep it up.

Re: Preliminary project one

Posted: Mon Sep 21, 2015 8:54 am
by sierra_style
I really like the first one in terms of drawing your attention in. I'm not sure if the font is the most legible you could have used. Cool Idea though, it would be cool if you made the headline/color scheme on the separate pages the colors of the boxes on the index page? Just a thought for later on.