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Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Sat Mar 01, 2014 3:28 pm
by eARTh2haleypw
Thanks to all for your feedback! Here's what I can up with. I attempted to stay true to a clean, well-organized layout but I did agree with a number of you who had commented on the flatness of my page. To solve this I decided to include a photograph and also boxes with transparency to my content area. Heeding the advice of the majority, I thought it'd be best to incorporate both of my preliminary concepts into one design. As a result, I felt I needed to adhere to grayscale because of the inclusion of the graphic and the color it introduced into the design. Also, I ditched my gallery white background to black. Let's hear what you think! :)

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Sat Mar 01, 2014 3:46 pm
by charliepecot
The contrast is really working for me. You've almost got this cool diagonal line separating the two halves. I would make that center black and white column a little higher to accentuate that.

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Mon Mar 03, 2014 9:59 pm
by c.j.jackson775
You could probably scale the navigation down it seems to be taking a little to much emphasis. But the layout is nice and different. Colors are good. Well done

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Mon Mar 03, 2014 10:56 pm
by wbenavente
Ooooohh-- I like this. I like this alot, especially your type choice. The grayscale suits this design and I like the colors of the vector image you added here. One thing I would point out though is add a little more variety on the size of your boxes. Like what chris pointed out, scaling down the navigation buttons would probably solve the variety in size but other than that, good job!

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 12:48 pm
by tehgrimza
Haley, you really nailed this one home. Real clean, with each link having its own little color img to roll with it. I like the layout and use of color, I believe they roll together very nicely.

Great job!

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 5:48 pm
by kirin
I love the vegetarian comment after the bacon ipsum. I like your design, I don't think theres anything you should change, so great job.

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 7:53 pm
by Instructor
This one's looking quite nice as well.

I like the switch to the black and gray, it really punches out your photo and any other color highlights you choose to use. Your navigation is easy to see and use. The sliced up vector self portrait gives what would be a straightforward Bauhausian design a nice shot of whimsy. Good clean well organized type throughout.

The big thing that bothers me about it are the thick vertical lines all over the place. My eye keeps catching on them and it gives the layout a disjointed feel. I'd either remove them or thin 'em out so their no thicker than the line at the bottom of your nav.

Excellent work!

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 8:32 pm
by aznpandaaa
I'm liking this a lot. I like your strong design elements. I like the colors you chose as well. Great job!

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 10:26 pm
by elizabeth_mejia
Wow this looks really great! I really love the images you used and the color you used in the images look great! It seems very neat and organized and it would be easy to navigate through. The only think I can suggest is to lighten up the name Williams just a little bit more with a slightly lighter gray color just so it pops out more.

Re: Haley Williams - Final Critique Project #1

Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2014 10:50 am
by MattShock23
I really like how you set your name on the top and the break-up of the composition overall, its very catchy and "designy." The only thing I see is that the white bars seem to be a little bigger than the boxes.... maybe shorten them a bit? Also the spacing in your images seems very scrunched up, add a bit more margin inside? Good job overall though.